雅思寫作范文精講：獨居的好壞
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【考官范文精讀】9分雅思大 作文 深度講解——獨居的利弊
In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
構(gòu)思過程：
獨居，也就是一個人生活，顯然有利有弊，如果選擇一邊倒觀點顯然都站不住腳，很難論證，需要分開討論平均用力。主體段一段寫好處，一段寫壞處。抽象類話題往往在尋找觀點上比較困難或者沒有方向，建議大家按照文波雅思教授的 方法 分類提取觀點。本篇考官分別從個人和經(jīng)濟的角度出發(fā)，層次分明論證清晰，值得大家學(xué)習(xí)。
Introduction
1)背景導(dǎo)入，說尤其在發(fā)達國家的大城市，最近幾年獨居變得更為常見。
In recent years it has become far more normal for people to live alone,particularly in large cities in the developed world.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：It adj. for sb. to do sth. 后置狀語補充，注意完成時has become;注意particularly的用法，舉特例方便直接，類似especially但語氣更強; in the developed world比in developed countries更地道;far more修飾normal代入感強)
2)觀點句，我認為這個趨勢的影響好壞各半。
In my opinion, this trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：簡單句 后置狀語;虛擬語氣could have;consequences高分詞;in equal measure高分搭配)
Main Paragraphs 1
1)段首概括，一個人住在個人和宏觀經(jīng)濟上都有好處。
The rise in one-person households can be seen as positive for both personal and broader economic reasons.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：被動 后置狀語并列;主語the rise in one-person households替換more people choose to live alone，地道高分搭配準(zhǔn)確;seen as語法得分點;personal & broader economic詞匯得分點)
2)分論點1：個人層面上，獨居的人可能變得比和家人一起住的人更獨立自強(常見觀點)
On an individual level, people who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：前置狀語 主語who從句 謂語比較級 賓語who從句，高分復(fù)合句;self-reliant高分詞，展示詞匯量)
3)舉例論證 線性推理展開：獨居年輕人需要 學(xué)做飯 ，做家務(wù)，付賬單，管賬等重要的生活技能;這樣的人增加了就是種正面的發(fā)展
A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills; an increase in the number of such individuals can certainly be seen as a positive development.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：主語從句 插入語 不定式并列 賓語all of which從句;簡單分句 被動;valuable得分詞;an increase語法得分點;such individuals指代準(zhǔn)確，語法和詞匯得分點)
4)分論點2：經(jīng)濟角度上看，獨居的趨勢會導(dǎo)致住房需求增加(加分觀點)
From an economic perspective, the trend towards living alone will result ingreater demand for housing.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：前置狀語 后置定語 簡單句;trend towards living搭配準(zhǔn)確，詞匯和語法得分點;result in學(xué)術(shù)搭配，詞匯得分點;demand for housing詞匯得分點)
5) 舉例說明展開：這樣會讓建筑公司，房產(chǎn)中介和 其它 依賴業(yè)主購買產(chǎn)品的公司獲益。
This is likely to benefit the construction industry, estate agents and a whole host of other companies that rely on homeowners to buy their products or services.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：簡單句 賓語并列 賓語that從句;likely to benefit學(xué)術(shù)搭配，詞匯得分點;construction industry & estate agents展示詞匯量;rely on homeowners詞匯得分點)
Main Paragraph 2
1)段首概括：上述個人和經(jīng)濟的論點可以反向考慮;(簡介易懂，掛鉤前文暗含對比，CC滿分技巧)
However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：轉(zhuǎn)折 簡單句被動;given above非謂語修飾，語法得分點;be considered from學(xué)術(shù)搭配，詞匯語法得分點;the opposite angle詞匯得分點)
2)分論點1：和獨立的好處相比，獨居的人會感覺孤獨、隔離和不安(常見觀點)
Firstly, rather than the positive feeling of increased independence, people who live alone may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation and worry.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：前置狀語 主語從句 賓語并列;rather than無痕跡對比，語法和CC得分點;loneliness & isolation高分詞)
3)舉例對比 論證展開：他們錯過了家人或室友提供的對話和支持，還要承擔(dān)過重的家庭賬單和職責(zé);這樣來說，這個趨勢就是負面的
They miss out on the emotional support and daily conversation that family or flatmates can provide, and they must bear the weight of all household bills and responsibilities; in this sense, perhaps the trend towards living alone is a negative one.
(句型結(jié)構(gòu)：簡單句并列 賓語從句 簡單分句;miss out on地道搭配;emotional support, daily conversation & flatmates詞匯加分點;bear the weight of高分搭配，詞匯得分點;a negative one指代準(zhǔn)確避免重復(fù)，語法得分點)
4)分論點2：從經(jīng)濟角度來說，住房需求增加會推高房價和租金(加分觀點)
Secondly, from the financial point of view, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and rents.
(句式結(jié)構(gòu):前置狀語 簡單句;the financial point of view替換an economic perspective;likely to push up學(xué)術(shù)搭配;property prices & rents詞匯得分點)
5)對比論證 說明展開：雖然讓企業(yè)獲益，但大眾包括獨居的人都要面臨更高的居住成本
While this may benefit some businesses, the general population, including those who live alone, will be faced with rising living costs.
(句式結(jié)構(gòu)：讓步句 插入語補充 被動;be faced with地道搭配;rising living costs詞匯得分點)
Conclusion
1)一句話 總結(jié) ：獨居增加對個人和經(jīng)濟影響有好有壞
In conclusion, the increase in one-person households will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy.
(句式結(jié)構(gòu)：總結(jié) 簡單句 賓補;detrimental不利的，高分詞，beneficial & detrimental替換positive & negative;兩個on介詞 短語 并列，語法得分點)
評分
TR: 兩面觀點完整回答問題，分論點詳實有深度，首尾段觀點總結(jié)到位，9分
CC: 全篇結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，整齊，行文連接通順，易于理解，沒有明顯模板痕跡，9分
LR: 詞匯非常多樣，同義替換到位，搭配地道準(zhǔn)確，9分
GA: 句型多變，復(fù)合句實用靈活，沒有語法錯誤，9分
(13 sentences, 306 words, band 9)
雅思寫作高分范文：獨居的利弊
More and more people are living by themselves today. What are the advantages of living alone? What are the disadvantages? Write an essay of about 250 words explaining the advantages and disadvantages.
You come home alone after a long day at work. You open the door to your home. No one is there. Is it blessed silence you hear - or echoing emptiness?
Millions of people who live alone today may have either experience. Some love living alone, yet others wish they didn't have to.
When they open that door at night, people who live alone do not have to put up with demands or listen to someone's noise or meet anyone's dinner deadlines. They do not have to debate about which TV program to watch or stay off the phone because someone else is expecting an important call. No one else messes up their kitchen.
But when they are sick, no one else will bring them an aspirin or call the doctor. Preparing dinner for one can be difficult, and eating dinner for one night after night can be very lonely. Perhaps no one really cares what they did all day. If they are feeling sad, there may be no one to cheer them up. Some people who live alone say the worst times come when something very good happens because there is no one to share the joy.
During the course of a lifetime, one may sometimes live with others and sometimes live alone. Each way of life has its advantages. Learning to take advantage of them is one key to contentment.
雅思寫作題目：越來越多的人獨居是好還是壞?
雅思寫作題目：
In some countries,more people choose to live by themselves in recent years.Why is the case?Is it a positive or negative development for the society?
解析：
11月19日的寫作題目是關(guān)于“居住方式”的話題：有些國家，越來越多的人愿意獨自住，而不是與父母、孩子、配偶生活在一起(甚至終身不結(jié)婚)，請問這個是好還是壞?這是個徹底的舊題，以前多次原題出現(xiàn)過，比如2013年4月13日、2013年8月3日、2014年9月27日。相關(guān)的話題也頻繁出現(xiàn)，比如2012年7月12日“大學(xué)生該住在學(xué)校還是住在家里”、2014年9月4日“因特網(wǎng)時代我們住在什么地方都不影響我們的工作和生活”、2016年4
月2日“多民族的人住在一起是好還是壞”等。
關(guān)于居住方式的問題，我們應(yīng)該怎樣解題呢?首先，從物質(zhì)層
面，獨自居住可以給我們自由的空間和時間，我們想干嘛就干嘛，比如不掃地，不洗碗，房間亂糟糟都不用擔(dān)心，但這種自由的代價就是可能養(yǎng)成一些不好的習(xí)慣;其次，從心理層面，獨自居住可能讓我們心理很放松，但是如果長期一個人住，就可能失去社交的能力;最后，從社會層面，獨自居住雖然減少了人與人之間的沖突，但也給社會資源增加了負擔(dān)和壓力。
高分范文及筆記：
Today,more and more people,especially in developed countries,choose to live alone.Some even go so far as to live all by themselves even if they have a spouse.Obviously,the benefits of living alone are multiple:freedom to come and go as you please;the space and solitude all to yourself;kingly or queenly domain over the bed.However,as far as I see it,all these benefits do not come without prices.
(1)本段給出背景，描述問題，然后給出自己的觀點：點出人們獨住的理由(多種好處)，并提出這些好處是有代價的。
(2)go as far as to do...竟然到了做......的地步(3)multiple(=many)多重的，很多的(4)solitude獨處;孤獨(5)all to oneself獨自擁有的(6)domain領(lǐng)地，范圍
(7)apparently表面上地;似乎，好像
To begin with,as TV has taught us once and again,the single-occupant home can be a breeding ground for eccentricities.In a sense,living alone represents the self let loose.In the absence of anybody else and his/her watchful eyes,the solo dweller is free to indulge his or her odd habits:no dish washing after dinner,standing naked in your kitchen at 2 a.m.,eating peanut butter from the jar,and so on.You may do these things again and again until it is too late for you to make a change.
(1)本段討論獨處的代價之一：養(yǎng)成怪習(xí)慣。先提出觀點(獨處養(yǎng)成怪習(xí)慣)，接著講因果關(guān)系(因為獨處就代表一個放縱的自我，沒有人監(jiān)視)，然后，舉例有哪些怪習(xí)慣(不洗碗、裸身站在廚房......)，最后總結(jié)這些習(xí)慣不易改變。
(2)本文需要不斷提及“一個人住”、“獨居”等意思，讀者可學(xué)習(xí)如下表達法，在恰當(dāng)?shù)牡胤竭M行替換：the single-
occupant home一個人住的家;the solo dweller獨居者;to live alone一個人住;to live all by himself一個人住
(3)breeding ground滋生地;溫床
(4)eccentricity怪異之處
(5)let loose釋放;放縱
(6)indulge沉溺
Then,for people who are comfortable and even good at living alone,there is often another concern:a fear that the concrete has set,so to speak,on their domestic habits and that it will be difficult to go back to living with someone else.A friend of mine got married after having been single and living by himself for many years,only to find that he was always quarreling with his wife because,in his words,she was constantly picking faults with his habits and lifestyle.It is not until a long time later that he realized he had to give up those oddities he picked up when he was living alone.
(1)本段討論獨居的代價之二：無法再與其他人共處。同樣，先提出觀點，接下來論述，然后舉例。
(2)concern擔(dān)憂
(3)concrete混凝土
(4)so to speak打個比方;就好像
(5)domestic habits家居習(xí)慣
(6)only to find...卻發(fā)現(xiàn)......
(7)pick faults with挑刺
(8)oddity奇怪的習(xí)慣;怪異之處(=eccentricity)
It is,of course,a matter of personal preference whether one chooses to live all by himself or with his friends or family members.If he finds freedom more important than anything else,living alone
is certainly a good choice.It would be the best choice of his if he understood how to avoid the perils,too.
(1)本段為結(jié)尾段，先提出是否獨居是個人選擇，接下去總結(jié)獨具的好處，最后提出獨居者應(yīng)該意識到并避免獨居的危險。
(2)personal preference個人偏好
(3)peril危險(=danger)
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